Part Three Writing(60 points) I.Revise each of the following sentences according to the requirement given in the brackets. Please write your revised version in the Answer Sheet.(30 points) 15.We must make the assumption that you wish to be transferred.(to improve vigor and directness) 16.We have shipped your order by UPS,and we are sure it will arrive in time for the sales promotion January 15.(to change to the“you”attitude） 17.We have received your letter,and we are sending the brochures you request.(to avoid saying what is obvious) 18.These brakes stop a car within a short distance.(to use concrete expressions) 19.There are numerous benefits that can result from a good program that focuses on customer service.(to make it concise) 20.The policy affected all vendors,suppliers,and those involved with consulting.(to develop parallelism) 21.Once we ascertain how much it costs,we can initiate the project.(to use familiar words) 22.If you had listened to our agent more carefully,you would know that your policy does not cover accidents outside the United States.(to make it courteous) 23.As per your verbal instruction,steps will be undertaken immediately to investigate your billing problem.(to make it conversational) 24.Any applicant for the position of fireman must submit a medical report signed by his physician.(to avoid gender stereotype) II.Revise the following E-mail message.And the formatting of the message is to be scored.(30 points) 25. TO:Jay S.Jacobs,VP Human Resources Sue Simmons and I,along with other Intercontinental Bank employees,have been eager to return to college,but we can't afford the costs of tuition and books. Many of us were forced to go to work before we could complete our college degrees.We know that the continuing education divisions of some universities provide good courses that 1434Part Three Writing (60 points) 1 . Revise each of the following sentences according to the requirement given in the brackets. Please write your revised version in the Answer Sheet. (30 points) 15. We must make the assumption that you wish to be transferred. (to improve vigor and directness) 16. We have shipped your order by UPS, and we are sure it wíll arrive in time for the sales promotion January 15. (to change to the "you" attitude) 17. We have received your letter, and we are sending the brochures you request. (to avoid saying what is obvious) 18. These brakes stop a car within a short distance. (to use concrete expressions) 19. There are numerous benefits that can result from a good program that focuses on customer service. (to make it concise) 20. The policy aHected all vendors, suppliers, and those involved with consulting. (to develop parallelism) 21. Once we ascertain how much it costs, we can initiate the project. (to use familiar words) 22. If you had listened to our agent more carefully , you would know that your policy does not cover accidents outside the United States. (to make it courteous) 23. As per your verbal instruction, steps will be undertaken immediately to investigate your billing problem. (to make it conversationaD 24. Any applicant for the position of fireman must submit a medical report signed by his physician. (to avoid gender stereotype) II. Revise the following E-mail message. And the formatting of the message is to be scored. (30 points) 25. TO: Jay S. Jacobs, VP Human Resources Sue Simmons and 1, along with other Intercontinental Bank employees, have been eager to return to college , but we can't afford the costs of tuition and books. Many of us were forced to go to work before we could complete our college degrees. We know that the continuing education divisions of some universities provide good courses that 1434